This is really informative! I honestly thought there were only three positions for offence and defense but this definitely proves me wrong. I really enjoy how in depth your wiki coverage is. Not only did you list the different positions but you really helped describe them so that they seem like more than just the words. The second paragraph the one involving the “line of scrimmage” definition I found exceptionally good. I’ve been on this earth 19 years and I’ve always heard that word and never understood what it was. I really enjoyed this article; I feel a lot smarter already!
This was definitely a good read. The first paragraph was pretty funny considering how nerve wreaking a task this seems. I felt really calm reading your wiki; it had a very positive feel to it. Your steps were very easy to follow and your formatting was very good. Another thing I liked was how you embraced an honest be-yourself attitude but you were funny about it so it wasn’t so cheesy. My only suggestion would be to add another picture. The one you have is very cute but I think maybe one at the end would make it look a little more professional. Overall, I’m very impressed with how you simplified a very stressful topic. Good job!
Hey, I thought this was a really cool article. It's an interesting design and felt like a really fun project. My only suggestion is to move the “Things You'll Need” section up top more before the actual steps. It will help the reader follow better. Other than that all your links worked and were very helpful. Also, I looked at the links you put up and I found the one on “healthy nails” to be really interesting. Perhaps you might want to include more of the information in that article in your how-to. Such as, the first step being to evaluate the condition of your nails. It would add more facts to your article as well as get useful information out there. Overall, your wiki is very well put together and professional. You did a great job!!
Wow, this is really cool. Your Wikipedia page looks really professional. I had no idea any groups like this existed but it was a very interesting experience to learn about. I only have two suggestions for the actual article. The sentence, “Suggestive imagery has been incorporated with music for…well for as long as many of us can remember,” seems a little out of place. The article starts in a professional way and this is more casual language. While the statement itself is completely true it might make your article look more professional if you re-worded it. My only other suggestion is for the article’s topic sentence. Most Wikipedia articles start with a topic sentence like “something” is an American “something” started in “whenever” by “someone.” That way if someone doesn’t want to read the entire article they could just find out real quickly what it’s about. However, the “What is it” section is still very well written and easy to understand whither you choose to use a topic sentence or not. Overall, it looks like you put a lot of time into this article and it looks great!
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The first paragraph to your article was hilarious! I loved the Call of Duty reference; it’s like you know what my life has come too. I really enjoyed the steps too, especially the one called “combine your ideas together”. I found this to be a really useful idea. I never include my significant other’s ideas in date night. The only recommendation I would make is under the step 2 “Find a space that’s comfortable” section there’s some strange text that’s stuck floating over the paragraphs that says, “one on one”. Also the title says “How to Convince Your Boyfriend to Celebrate Valentine's Day” but the word “day” floats over the actual body text. Perhaps shortening the title to “v-day” would make the text fit on the page better. Overall, it was really good and really funny. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you!
The first paragraph to your article was hilarious! I loved the Call of Duty reference; it’s like you know what my life has come too. I really enjoyed the steps too, especially the one called “combine your ideas together”. I found this to be a really useful idea. I never include my significant other’s ideas in date night. The only recommendation I would make is under the step 2 “Find a space that’s comfortable” section there’s some strange text that’s stuck floating over the paragraphs that says, “one on one”. Also the title says “How to Convince Your Boyfriend to Celebrate Valentine's Day” but the word “day” floats over the actual body text. Perhaps shortening the title to “v-day” would make the text fit on the page better. Overall, it was really good and really funny. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you!
